Black Poetry : ~Inevitable: A Small Stream~

Mind~$oul

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Our foundation was put
into a bottle and thrown
into the Mississippi...
both hoping somehow it's
journey will reach a destiny...
Nine years we spent
loving each other, though
at times I played behind
a false heart...

There were once seeds
planted inside of you...
along with the lies
you consumed...
Ignorant to the pain I caused
I guess you had the right to...
kill our future...

I often dream of the times
when we would play...
under the honeysuckle shade...
You'd dare to walk brimstone
just to show me the way...
to a heavens gate...
but only you could
be my god...somebody
I could actually see...
touch and smell...
for a crying river, this is
the perfect song...

Our promises are off floating
in the father of waters...
along with twains adventures...
soaked in this nation's history
and ours is coming to an end
so it seems...

Understand that love
is something I fear...
not the hollow tips
that pierced my chest...
nor my blood that stained
your soft hands...
but saying, "i love you" and
living up to it...

I cant reach for things
out in the galaxy...
just to prove exactly
what I mean...
and i'm not climbing
the highest peaks...
I can make love to
you all night...
and you can search
through my eyes...
while our bodies
become one...
and you'll never find
a sign of my
love...

I'm sorry
 

$$RICH$$

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very warm and acceptable to a heart of love
worthy note to reverse the inevitable...........
flow on
 

1poetsought

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I enjoyed this remarkable poem. You should take a full amount of pride in this effort.
 

angelicsage

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Mind~$oul said:
Our foundation was put
into a bottle and thrown
into the Mississippi...
both hoping somehow it's
journey will reach a destiny...
Nine years we spent
loving each other, though
at times I played behind
a false heart...

There were once seeds
planted inside of you...
along with the lies
you consumed...
Ignorant to the pain I caused
I guess you had the right to...
kill our future...


I often dream of the times
when we would play...
under the honeysuckle shade...
You'd dare to walk brimstone
just to show me the way...

to a heavens gate...
but only you could
be my god...somebody
I could actually see...
touch and smell...
for a crying river, this is
the perfect song...


Our promises are off floating
in the father of waters...
along with twains adventures...
soaked in this nation's history
and ours is coming to an end
so it seems...

Understand that love
is something I fear...
not the hollow tips
that pierced my chest...
nor my blood that stained
your soft hands...
but saying, "i love you" and
living up to it...

I cant reach for things
out in the galaxy...
just to prove exactly
what I mean...
and i'm not climbing
the highest peaks...
I can make love to
you all night...
and you can search
through my eyes...
while our bodies
become one...
and you'll never find
a sign of my
love...

I'm sorry

whoa...

you are a sight for sore eyes...

I've always enjoyed reading you and this poem...*sigh* this poem...
gleams with a duality of beauty and painful reality...
sometimes there is compatibility to some degree
but that "tko" kinda love just isn't there...

the metaphors in this piece...blew me away...
particularly the ones I quoted in bold
I wasn't expecting...the "unexpected" ending but whoa
it's so beautiful...even with the unhappy ending

wow...I swimmed deeply in this flow

Encore poet...this was a diamond amidst sand and stone!
 

watzinaname

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This piece was laden with such descriptive verse, and there was also a "face the facts" edge to it, that made this piece different. Well written art poet, do flow on.
 

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