Poetry Critiques : Crown for Abused Children


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Jan 18, 2010
this is the crown for a ring sonnet series i wrote a few years back. the final poem is an acrostic, and check out the first letter (for those who might have missed it):

a Crown for Abused children

invisible are the sinless sufferers, which kill our souls

tears stain unwavering, unbroken chains

keeps my heart heavy holding darkened skies

invoking God fails to quell the pain

like closed ears, closed eyes, closed mouths, closed minds

lessons betray me: “Vengeance is mine”

struck by the momentum of a downhill ball

overpowered by a disease that affects us all

until i am dead, i'll make you tall

rather then cower being defenseless and small

stand strong, escape and close your eyes

Optimistic Tomorrows hear your call

unable to cross without paying tolls

leave this place by plane, train, or shopping mall

sever those ties; it kills our souls

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